I don't know why, but this would sound better if a black person was saying it. (african american, sorry)
This came to me at 2 am and I couldn't sleep until I jotted it all down.
I think we can all agree that there's a difference between drawing or doing an art-related task, and actually BEING an artist. It's like playing games vs. being a GAMER. It's like singing songs vs. being a SINGER. It's like cutting your hair vs. being a HAIR STYLIST. Get my drift?
I tried to incorporate every art form that I could think of, or that I myself have experimented with. Sorry if I missed some - I think making this any longer would be an eyesore however lol.
Btw I know I got the "quadruple, quintuple...etc" part wrong. Stfu lol.
CRITIQUE FOR WRITTEN REVOLUTION:
Why is it written the way it is?
This peice is meant to be read aloud, and it didn't quite sound right unless it was given a sort of slang to it. I'm not trying to pinpoint the voice anyone uses to read this to any certain "accent" or "character", but without it it certainly lacks a lot of depth. I have mentioned that reading it in an African American sort of...tone(?)...makes it sound better but that's just my opinion, lol. I'm not trying to be racist or particular, there's just...you know...it's like....ahh it's hard to explain lol. But one can use whatever way of speaking they want when reading. It's really up to the reader.
Why are the people only listed as numbers like 1 and 2? Why don't you use names or descriptions of the people?
I want the main focus to be the dialogue of #2. I don't mean to make them seem insignificant, I just don't want people to get too caught up in any background story or details about the people in general. This way, they can use their imagination to fill in who they want 1 and 2 to be, making them easier to relate to.
While reading this, can one understand how it's meant to be read by the way I wrote it? Is the pace too fast? Should I rewrite the way certain lines are written in order to help create a better mood? Can fellow artists relate to this piece at all, and understand the message I'm trying to get across?