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1: "Look at these paintings. They're just awful."

2: "That's their vision as an artist. Don't hate, my friend."

1: "Oh I know about being an artist. I know how to draw."

2: "Being able to draw doesn't make you an artist."

1: "Huh?"

2: "You gotta feel it.
You gotta taste it, know it, eat it, breathe it, see it, LIVE it.
You gotta shudder as the colors pour from your veins.
You gotta scrape at the canvas just to understand your vision.
You can't eat - you gotta STARVE!
You gotta lose a loaf of bread for some tubes of paint and fall asleep at your canvas still dressed in yo paint splattered apron.
You gotta get F's because you were too busy daydreaming about what your next project will be.
You gotta get writer's block.
You gotta get artist's block.
You gotta get blocks of your blocks then get blocked some more.
You gotta get drained of inspiration for years then explode with something amazing.
You gotta scramble to the nearest object just to put it down somewhere.
You gotta spray, shake, and vandalize.
You gotta break rules.
You gotta beg for a reaction.
You gotta wake up at 2 am to spew your ideas on paper, on text, on ink-stained skin.
You gotta type til your fingers cramp and burn at the joints.
You gotta double check, triple check, quadruple check, quintuple check, sextuple check, check again then check some more.
You gotta cry salty tears when others walk past you.
You gotta post your name everywhere.
You gotta scream it, sing it,  draw it out like notes on notebook paper.
You gotta skip class.
You gotta look at every blank surface as if it were the start of a new journey.
You gotta show emotions.
You gotta mimic the emotions of your character on your face as you draw.
You gotta adjust, re-adjust, re-re-adjust.
You gotta change the settings.
You gotta create your own light.
You gotta work in pitch black.
You gotta erase, you gotta tear out pages and pages and pages and end up drawing on cardboard.
You gotta play it like the ribcage that protects your heart.
You gotta close your eyes and let your ears do the talking.
You gotta cut, you gotta paste and mend and burn even when it's life threatening.
You gotta spend all yo damn money on it.
You gotta stay up til 4 in the morning just to fill in the lines.
You gotta get laughed at.
You gotta do the laughing.
You gotta stand perfectly still.

And if you don't do all of that then you're no artist. You just draw."
I don't know why, but this would sound better if a black person was saying it. (african american, sorry)

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This came to me at 2 am and I couldn't sleep until I jotted it all down.

I think we can all agree that there's a difference between drawing or doing an art-related task, and actually BEING an artist. It's like playing games vs. being a GAMER. It's like singing songs vs. being a SINGER. It's like cutting your hair vs. being a HAIR STYLIST. Get my drift?

I tried to incorporate every art form that I could think of, or that I myself have experimented with. Sorry if I missed some - I think making this any longer would be an eyesore however lol.

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Btw I know I got the "quadruple, quintuple...etc" part wrong. Stfu lol.

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CRITIQUE FOR WRITTEN REVOLUTION:

Why is it written the way it is?
This peice is meant to be read aloud, and it didn't quite sound right unless it was given a sort of slang to it. I'm not trying to pinpoint the voice anyone uses to read this to any certain "accent" or "character", but without it it certainly lacks a lot of depth. I have mentioned that reading it in an African American sort of...tone(?)...makes it sound better but that's just my opinion, lol. I'm not trying to be racist or particular, there's just...you know...it's like....ahh it's hard to explain lol. But one can use whatever way of speaking they want when reading. It's really up to the reader.

Why are the people only listed as numbers like 1 and 2? Why don't you use names or descriptions of the people?
I want the main focus to be the dialogue of #2. I don't mean to make them seem insignificant, I just don't want people to get too caught up in any background story or details about the people in general. This way, they can use their imagination to fill in who they want 1 and 2 to be, making them easier to relate to.

While reading this, can one understand how it's meant to be read by the way I wrote it? Is the pace too fast? Should I rewrite the way certain lines are written in order to help create a better mood? Can fellow artists relate to this piece at all, and understand the message I'm trying to get across?

Thank you.
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:iconriocari48:
Riocari48 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I just, Yes.
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2015   General Artist
:D
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BrokenDialect Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
THIS MADE ME SO HAPPY INSIDE!
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:iconlunanoctis:
LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014   General Artist
I'm glad it made you happy :D
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x-RayneArashi-x Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You gotta get writer's block. 
You gotta get artist's block. 
You gotta get blocks of your blocks then get blocked some more.

LOL
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner May 4, 2014   General Artist
Lmao I never realized how funny that was until now.
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HoneyWolfRin Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013
SO TRUE 

especially the mimic the character's emotions one X3 I was doodling in class and the kid next to me is like "you look like you stuck a fork in the toaster omg wtf" 
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Anime-Innovator Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Yes... F'ing Yes!
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dinorex33 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I have an imaginary robe that I were every single day and night. I very rarely pull down the hood but I pull it down for you. So congrats on getting me to do it. This is truly verbal art. Well done.
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013   General Artist
Wow, thank you very much :)
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dinorex33 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome... ^^' Eh heh.
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DrawTheRainbow79 Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
So incredibly moving and touching, and it's so true! I tip my hat to you. :)
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner May 5, 2013   General Artist
Thank you :)
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PearlyGirl77 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I do all those things, and one of my "friends" cam along and said the "oh I know about being an artist. I know how to draw." And I saw some of her "work" and its coping off of mine. She stole my effing style she just makes me so pissed.

Sorry for ranting. Love the work~
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013   General Artist
That's a shame :( Well she'll eventually be exposed for being a walking copy machine, and will never be a true artist. It's her loss, because you'll keep progressing and become truly talented and people will eventually realize what she really is. Karma will sort her out :) And don't worry about the rant lol.

Thank you.
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Ravens-of-Rome Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I had tears in my eyes when I was reading the "You gotta..." part.
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013   General Artist
I'm touched that you found it so moving :)
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Royal-Demon Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's very inspiring. In fact, I had tears in my eyes while reading this because it's so true. I wasn't crying, I just had tears in my eyes! Just to make that clear...
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012   General Artist
Lol, well I'm glad that something I wrote was so inspiring to someone :)
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Zurthuryx Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
As an author I can relate to this. Also, it does come off better if you picture a black person saying these things. That was a nice touch. Good job on this.
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012   General Artist
Thank you :3
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JuanPabloJimenez Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
personally i can perfectly relate with it, even though you made it very personal, a lot of the statements are general enough for people to understand them, and their really powerfull.
At least that's what I believe.
I really liked it, but it Do goes a litle too fast i think.
Besides i really didn't understand the african american reference... may be a cultural thing? idnow...
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012   General Artist
Thank you =D It's supposed to be kinda fast-paced though. I picture the narrator on a stage kinda doing something similar to slam poetry, and the reason why I mentioned the African American thing is that the way they talk is perfect for the tone of the poem.
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hebe-goddess Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This inspired me, thank you :aww: i can tell you will go far as an artist :meow:
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:iconlunanoctis:
LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012   General Artist
Thank you =)
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hebe-goddess Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
your welcome :D
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Deikus-is-hellbound Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2011  Student General Artist
ha i know i am a little late, considering this was submitted like a year ago, but i often serarch DA for literature for drawing inspiration, and this....was just too amazing to pass up. I can totally see where youre comming from with the african american reaading it, they havea great quaility to their voice, and their slang makes it rich and i could totally hear an african american reading this as i was silently reading it. And this is a perfect description of the life of the artist, to a tee. I do not believe that i have ever seen it depicted so clearly before, and i wanted to say great job with this, and sorry that is like one year later xD
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2011   General Artist
Thank you very much! You're too kind ^^ And don't worry about it being a late comment. The fact that my poetry is read and liked at all is enough for me =D
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Deikus-is-hellbound Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2011  Student General Artist
:D keep it up!
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2011   General Artist
Thanks! ^^
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THe-RICH-HOBo Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011  Student General Artist
it's like the saying "paint the town red" only to the next level. Good job, bro.
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011   General Artist
Thanks
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MusicLover74 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This is absolutely amazing. Fantastic job.
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:iconlunanoctis:
LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2011   General Artist
Thank you!
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manga-ka-jen Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011
I've been going through some issues with my artistness lately and this is exactly what I needed to hear. thank you.
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011   General Artist
I'm glad I could help ^^ Don't worry, I'm sure things will get better.
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daltheznadof Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2011  Student
I love it.
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2011   General Artist
Thank you ^^
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daltheznadof Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2011  Student
Your welcome. :3
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Bibotii Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hmm, I'm not an artist :<......yet >__<
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2011   General Artist
Don't worry. You'll get there XD
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vibrancy Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010
"I don't know why, but this would sound better if a black person was saying it." I swear, this was going to be my comment. LOVE THIS! I think this should be my own personal anthem. And this is sooooo true. Your message is very strong. Congrats on the amazing art.
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010   General Artist
Thank you so much!! XD
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rainbowchickens Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2010  Student General Artist
haha i could relate to this a lot :D
(You gotta wake up at 2 am to spew your ideas on paper, on text, on ink-stained skin.)... happens to me all the time haha ... and when i say that i don't just mean with drawing, for me, its more so with music and writing...

I thought the concept was very good, i enjoyed it, but i do think the 'you gotta' bit was too repetitious, you could have changed them occasionally or started off some of the sentences without it, and then i think and it would have flown a bit better that way, in my opinion.

..and I do understand what you mean with the whole "sounds better in a black person was saying it", they generally would have the right type of voice for it in my mind too.

good job :D
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2010   General Artist
Thanks ^^ I get what you mean with the "you gotta" thing too. I wasn't sure about that. I wanted the repetition to sorta...make every point stronger, if that makes sense? But I suppose I didn't necessarily need it in every line. Thanks for pointing that out. I could change it but I might just be too lazy for that now loool.
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rainbowchickens Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2010  Student General Artist
Yeah, i see what you mean.. although.. yeah.. when i read it it didn't really have that effect for me i don't think... it just got... slightly irritating? idk if thats quite the right word.. but yeah, you probably get the picture.

... anyway, i'm no expert. it's still a good poem the way it is.. so you don't have to go change it because of me if you don't want :D
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2010   General Artist
Nah I understand. If I do change it, maybe I'll just label it as "version 2" or something just in case because I think I might like both with and without the "you gotta"'s XD

Thanks for the feedback! XDD
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rainbowchickens Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2010  Student General Artist
no problem xD
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MaddyMadness Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2010  Student General Artist
I hate saying "So true man!" but it is.
And it's alright it goes super fast :/ It is like oral speech~ You start and cannot stop...
Congrats
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LunaNoctis Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2010   General Artist
Thank you XD
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